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The map show a present layout of an office building and plans for its future redevelopment.

The map provides information about
nowadays
Correct determiner usage
the
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 office tower and its forecasted changes.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that the area will experience a number of significant changes. Another striking feature is that all rooms expect of west entrance and storeroom will
transformed
Verb problem
be transformed
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. Looking at the details, as regards the western part, the most
noticable
Correct your spelling
noticeable
 change is that the grass will be divided into
a
Correct article usage
apply
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chairs and
outdoor
Correct article usage
an outdoor
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 seating area.
On the other hand
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, the east past will
illustrated
Wrong verb form
illustrate
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 the same, but
on
Change preposition
in
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 a
meating
Correct your spelling
meeting
 area, chairs and
coffee
Correct article usage
a coffee
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 machine with a toilet in the top right corner.
Nevertheless
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, the southern direction will
modified
Verb problem
be modified
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considerable
Rephrase
considerably
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,
for instance
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, now it
have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
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 two offices and an entrance between them, but it will have four offices
and
Punctuation problem
, and
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 entrace will be moved to
right
Correct article usage
the right
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.
However
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, the opposite way to
south
Correct article usage
the south
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 have the modest prognosis, only the kitchen and canteen will be converted into
an
Correct article usage
apply
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offices
and
Punctuation problem
, and
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 that's it.

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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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