The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, Band Cover four different seasons.

The chart gives information about the scores by three teams
A
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, B and
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, during the four seasons 2002 and 2005.
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, the
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for all three teams
A
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, B, and
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C,
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C
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show a decrease
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apply
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then
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, but the scores for
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B were significantly higher than those of teams A and
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. Presents data concerning
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C
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, the
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was decline
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declined
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during the period. They started at about 85
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in 2002 and
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fell
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to 60
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on
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in
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2003.
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,
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have fallen to their lowest point - 43
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. After that, the number rose to 55
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at the end
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of the period. Even after a slight rise, the
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wуку lower than at the start. At the same time, the
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for
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A and
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C
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,
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started at about 5 and 10
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in 2002.
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slight growth in 2003, and reached a peak in 2004, 15
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for
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A and 35
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for
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C
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. After
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which
the number started to fall, and stopped at 8
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for
team
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A, and 5
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for
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team C
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C
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, respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "subsequently".
Vocabulary: Replace the words c, figures, team, points with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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