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Band 4

People living in the twenty first century generally have a better quality of life than people who lived in previous centuries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Compared to our
ancestors
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ancestors'
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 livelihood,
current
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the current
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 living
condition
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conditions
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 of humankind
is
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are
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 significantly better
and
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 I strongly agree with
this
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 statement. During
1900s
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the 1900s
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and
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before
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before,
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 most
people
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 didn’t have
access
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 to proper healthcare.
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, the
amount
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number
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 of
people
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 who died because of a simple cold is quite high.
People
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 nowadays can continue their daily lives without worrying about being sick because existing health facilities and medicines can protect their lives when needed. Back in the day
our
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 society wasn’t even strong enough to control an outbreak compared to now.
Best
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The best
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 example is the largest known outbreak in the history of
mankind
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mankind,
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 known as the “Black Death”.
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COVID-19
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the COVID-19
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 outbreak was worldwide, it was controlled
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 the damage was mitigated because of
current
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the current
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 strong healthcare systems.
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, back in the
day
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day,
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 most
people
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 were dying
due to
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 not having
access
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 to proper
food
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.
Healthy
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 and
a
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apply
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safe meal was even considered
as
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a luxury. Starving citizens were a common
site
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sight
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 in most countries. But these days most
people
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 are fortunate enough to eat a healthy and a well balanced meal easily regardless of their financial situation.
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,
low income
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low-income
 families have
access
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 to
food
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 banks to collect fresh and various
kind
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kinds
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 of
food
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 for free.
This
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 proves how much as a
civilization
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civilisation
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 we have evolved and live a better life. In conclusion, having
access
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 to quality medicines and healthy
food
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have
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has
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 provided a better
lives
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life
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 for the current
people
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 compared to
old
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the old
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 days.

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coherence cohesion
Make your main idea more clear in each body part at the start of the part.
coherence cohesion
Use linking words more carefully, so ideas move in a more smooth way.
task achievement
Add one more direct idea about quality of life, not only health and food.
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Explain some examples more, so the reader can see your point in a full way.
task achievement
Check word forms and small grammar errors, because they can make meaning less clear.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, two body parts, and an end.
task achievement
You stay on the topic and give real examples like Black Death and COVID-19.
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Your opinion is clear from the start and stays the same to the end.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Quality of life
  • Technological advancements
  • Healthcare improvements
  • Life expectancy
  • Mortality rates
  • Standard of living
  • Economic growth
  • Job opportunities
  • Education access
  • Literacy rates
  • Human rights
  • Gender equality
  • Working conditions
  • Industrialization
  • Environmental issues
  • Modern conveniences
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