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Writing Samples
Band 3

"Education is not a luxury, but a basic human right and as such should be free for everyone irrespective of personal wealth. Do you agree or disagree?"

In today's modern world, there is an
ongoin deate
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ongoing debate
 about
education
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 that it is a fundamental human right for
everyone
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.
While
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 some countries charge for
education
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, others argue that it should be free. I agree that
education
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 should be free for
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everyone
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everyone,
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 irrespective of personal
status
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.
This
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 essay will examine my views.
Firstly
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, free
education
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help
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helps
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 the
country
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country's
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economy
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.
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Therefore
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 authorities should provide free learning to every
citizens
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citizen
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 regarding their economic
status
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.
As a result
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,
this
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 helps
country
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the country
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 to get better
empoyees
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employees
 and improve
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economy
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the economy
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.
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, many
european
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European
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 countries provide free
education
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 to
everyone
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,
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.
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As a
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result
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result,
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 they are
well developed
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well-developed
 countries
and
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, and
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 many foreign students are enrolling to get free
education
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because
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, because
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 of that it help to grow
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economy
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the economy
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.
Secondly
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, free
education
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provide
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provides
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 equal opportunities for every citizen regarding of their
status
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.
This
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 will boost employment
and
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, and
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 every citizen can get jobs
and
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 they can uplift from poverty.
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, in
India
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India,
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 several
education
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 policy has introduce for economical weaker section by providing them free
education
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 and
reserved them
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reserving
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 some seats,
as a
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result
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result,
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 several
family
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families
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 were uplifted from poverty. To
summaries
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summarise
, providing
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education free
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free education
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 can
brings
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bring
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 several beneifits
such
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 as it can improve ecomomy and
many
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lifting many
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 family were uplift from poverty. I agreed that learning
shpuld
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should
 be free for
everyone
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 regardless
their
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economy
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economic
status
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.

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Write your main idea in a more clear way in each body part.
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Add one more short reason to make your answer more full.
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Use examples with more clear detail, not only general facts.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like first, also, because, so, and as a result.
coherence and cohesion
Check that each sentence follows the last one in a smooth way.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main idea in one paragraph and explain it fully.
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You clearly give your opinion in the introduction and conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear 4-part structure: introduction, 2 body parts, and conclusion.
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You use examples from real countries like Europe and India.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fundamental right
  • accessible
  • social mobility
  • personal and professional development
  • overall development
  • equality
  • social disparities
  • access
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