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One of your penfriends wants to imporve his/her English in advance of moving to Sydney. Write a letter to your penfriend. Advice him/her about the following: listening skills, speaking skills and vocabulary.

Hello Carrie, I hope you are doing very well. I heard that you are planning to move to Sydney
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next spring
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 you feel challenged in communicating in English. To provide necessary assistance, I would like to write to provide several suggestions on listening, speaking and vocabulary
according to
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 English, it is always my prime recommendation
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 you
can
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be exposed to speaking English daily. Sufficient internet resources can be taken advantage of so that you can listen to them even during your chore time. When you find yourselves understand more and
get
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 confident to open your mouth, I
advice
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advise
 you
start
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to start
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 to
summarize
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 what you have comprehended and speak out loudly. To be more effective at
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 stage, you can write down and check some necessary new words beforehand so that you can apply them
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 your
summarization
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.
This
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 a shortcut
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 mastering and
improve
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 your vocabulary. In
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listenning
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 as the starter, you eventually can make steady progress both in your speaking skills and vocabulary. If you have any
question
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 during
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 journey, contact me without hesitation
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. Sincerely, Abigail

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts, but add a bit more clear advice for each skill.
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Task response: Some advice is general. Give one simple example for listening, speaking, and words.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your ideas are in a good order, but some long lines are hard to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Make one paragraph for listening, one for speaking, and one for vocabulary.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Use simple link words like First, Next, Also, and Finally.
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Task response: You cover listening, speaking, and vocabulary.
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Task response: The tone is warm and helpful for a friend.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear opening and ending.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Most ideas connect well and are easy to understand.
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