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Some people feel that they should not have to pay any tax and should be able to keep all of the money that they earn. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is no denying the fact that some people believe taxation is the responsibility of the government.
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 it is commonly believed that individuals should not have to pay
taxes
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 and should be allowed to keep all the money they earn, there is
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 an opposing view. In my opinion, I believe that citizens should not have to pay
taxes
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.
To begin
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 with, the government should assist its people by
canceling
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taxes
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 and giving them the opportunity to save more money.
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, the country should provide for the needs of its citizens,
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 as creating jobs, increasing salaries, and reducing the cost of living.
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, it should offer affordable essential services,
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 as food, healthcare, and transportation.
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 would have a positive impact on the country’s economy. Another point to consider is that countries should have diverse investments, which can help reduce prices and compensate for the lack of tax revenue. It is
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 possible to argue that investing in different sectors can generate sufficient income for the country.
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, every country has its own strengths, which should be used as an advantage.
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, countries in the Middle East depend heavily on oil as a major source of income. In conclusion, despite differing opinions, I believe that governments can find alternative ways to generate income without relying on
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, especially since many people are struggling and want to live comfortably.

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task response
For task response: your answer is clear, but you need to explain why your view is stronger. Add one or two clear reasons against the other side.
task response
For task response: some ideas are good, but they are quite general. Use more specific examples and explain them more.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: your essay has a clear start, middle, and end. But some links between ideas are basic. Use clearer topic sentences and make each paragraph focus on one main point.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: support your main points more. For example, explain how no tax would help people and how the government could still pay for public services.
task response
For task response: you answered the question and gave a clear opinion from the start.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: the essay is easy to follow, with a clear introduction and conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: you used simple linking words like 'To begin with', 'In addition', and 'In conclusion' well.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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