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A friend told you recently that he/she had gone to an excellent restaurant. You wonder if this restaurant will be suitable for your birthday party next week. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter tell your friend about your planned party ask what the restaurant is called and for directions to get there ask what kind of food it serves and if your friend has any particular recommendations from the menu You should You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Pat,

Dear Pat, I'm writing to let you know
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 my
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 birthday party next week. I'm still confused about where to hold it.
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, I remember that you have been to a great restaurant lately, and I was wondering if you think it may be suitable to host the party. I can't recall its name, so I would appreciate it if you kindly remind me. I would
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 like to know how to get
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 as I ignore its location. You can send me the postcode
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, it would be easier to follow it.
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, since you have eaten there, could you tell me what kind of cuisine they serve
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 if you have any specific recommendations from the menu ? something that you really enjoyed and you advise me to order, as it is my birthday, I'm longing for something really special for the occasion. I can't wait to see you ! Cheers Dean

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Task response: You answer all parts, but add one more line about your party, like how many people will come.
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Task response: Some word choice is not natural. Say 'upcoming birthday party' or 'birthday party next week', not 'incoming birthday party'.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your ideas are in a clear order, but split the last long part into two sentences to make it easier to read.
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Coherence and cohesion: Use simple linking words like 'also', 'so', and 'because' to join ideas more smoothly.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Add a comma in 'what kind of cuisine they serve there, and if you have...' and do not put a space before '?'.
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Task response: You cover the name, place, food, and menu ideas, so the main points are all there.
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Task response: The purpose of the letter is clear from the start.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
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Coherence and cohesion: Your closing is friendly and fits a letter to a friend.
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