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The pie charts below show how dangerous waste products are dealt with in three countries. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts illustrate how dangerous waste products are dealt with in
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Republic
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the Republic
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 of
Korea
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,
Sweden
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, and the United Kingdom. The units are measured in percentage.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that there are three types in
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Republic
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the Republic
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 of
Korea
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, and
Sweden
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include
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includes
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:
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apply
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 recycling, underground, and
incineration
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,
whereas
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 in
UK
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the UK
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, there are four kinds
include
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apply
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:
underground
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including underground
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,
incineration
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, chemical treatment, and dumping at sea. On
other
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the other
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 hand, the greatest
type
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 is recycling in
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Republic
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the Republic
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 of
Korea
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. As regards
Sweden
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 and
UK
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the UK
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, the greatest
type
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 is underground. Looking at the details, we can notice that underground presents the greatest
type
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 in
Sweden
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 and
UK
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the UK
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 at 55%, 82%, respectively,
while
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incineration
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 shows the lowest kind at 20%, 2%, respectively. In terms of
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Republic
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the Republic
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 of
Korea
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, underground presents approximately
one fifth
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one-fifth
,
while
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incineration
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 shows just under
one ten
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one-tenth
. Looking at more
detils
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details
, recycling presents the greatest
type
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 in
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Republic
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the Republic
show examples
 of
Korea
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 at 69%,
while
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 it presents at a quarter in
Sweden
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words republic, korea, sweden, incineration, type with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "presents" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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