The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

The two maps illustrate the change of
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road
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the road
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system around a City Hospital in three years of construction (2007-2010). In general,
it is clear that
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the
road
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system undergoes a significant modernisation, with the introduction of roundabouts, separate parking facilities, and a
bus
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station. In 2007, the hospital was surrounded
with
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by
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a Ring
Road
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in the northern part, which connected to the city motorway via a Hospital
Road
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, where six
bus
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stops run on
the
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both sides. There
were
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also
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a shared car park
to
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in
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the eastern area of the Hospital
Road
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. In 2010, a major redevelopment
has been taken
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place, with the construction of a
bus
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station in the south-west area
was
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the most noticeable
,
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hence
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, the
bus
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stands were completely removed.
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, two roundabouts were introduced, one at the northern junction and at the southern intersection,
which each of them
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each of which
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had
small
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a small
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road
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connecting to the station.
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, the original shared car park was replaced by separate facilities,
which the
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and a
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larger public parking
was
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lot was
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built in the eastern area
of
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outside the hospital building. Eventually, maintaining shape and location, the hospital, the ring, and the metro motorway experienced no change.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words road, bus with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • dual carriageway
  • roundabout
  • traffic flow
  • multi-story car park
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian provisions
  • footpaths
  • traffic signals
  • construction phase
  • ambulances
  • carriageway expansion
  • traffic congestion
  • pedestrian crossings
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure development
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