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Some people think that giving daily homeworks results in students' high academical performance, while others think that giving daily homeworks is not the main reason for their achievements

There are many heated discussions about
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students
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be
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should be
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 given
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 everyday to be more successful academically
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giving
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whether giving
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homeworks
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 too frequently is not the key factor for good grades. I personally think that the impact of the
homeworks
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 are in their quality, intensity and engagement.
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 with, most of the people believe in the efficiency of everyday
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homeworks
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 because of the old and more conservative education system, which is mostly about the quantity and
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consistency
 rather than relying on other scientific
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research
 based on how to reach the highest efficiency. It hasn't adjusted a bit since the first time it was invented and is much easier to put it in use
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that is
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 why it is considered the standard almost everywhere,
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: in Russia, in Kazakhstan, in the UK, etc.
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, there are many studies and researches of the scientists which prove that absence of diversity with too much frequency doesn't affect the academical achievements of the
students
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 in a positive way, as it is not interesting enough that will eventually lead to losing interest.
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, it is critical to add different types of
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. It is widely used in Denmark, Finland and many other countries, which are considered
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 of the
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happiest in the world.
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, it is vital to diversify the educational process for
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 to reach significant
academical
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academic
 achievements, since it is not only about the materials
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also
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 the emotional and mental matters of the
students
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 that affect their results.

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Answer both sides more clearly. You talk more about one side, so the balance is not strong.
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Make your main view very clear in the introduction. Say exactly why you agree or disagree.
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Add more clear support for each main point. One strong reason with one clear example is better.
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Use examples that connect directly to school work and student results.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, middle, and end, which is good.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas more smoothly. Some sentences are long and hard to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words like first, however, for example, and in the end.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main idea in each body paragraph and explain it step by step.
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You answer the question and give your own opinion.
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You include both views, not only one side.
coherence and cohesion
There is an introduction and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Your paragraphs are in a clear order.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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