The bar chart provides information about how many visitors who came to art galleries in six different countries in 2011

The graph shows the number of visits
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6 art museums
of
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different countries in 2011.
Overall
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,
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It
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is clear that the
french
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French
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museum
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"the Louvre" is the most visited, followed by the Metropolitan
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museum
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Museum
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in the
united stats
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United States
and the British
Museum
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in the United kingdom that count
approximativelly
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approximately
the same
amount
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number
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of visitors,
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moreover
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the three others have a similar popularity
,
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to finish
Russia
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, Russia
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has the least visited gallery. The Louvre is
most
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famous and visited
museum
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of the list in 2011, with just under 9
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millions
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visitors.
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the second by 3
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millions
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, almost counts the addition of the bottom three of rankings or three times
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Hermitage figures. The US and UK galleries recorded respectively around 6
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millions
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visits, which is
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two-thirds
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of the top-ranked Louvre and
the
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double
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Russia. The
last
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galleries
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seen around 3
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tourist walking through their
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exhibitions
.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum, millions with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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