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The bar chart provides information about how many visitors who came to art galleries in six different countries in 2011

The graph shows the number of visits
in
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to
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 6 art museums
of
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in
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 different countries in 2011.
Overall
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,
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It
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it
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 is clear that the
french
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French
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museum
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 "the Louvre" is the most visited, followed by the Metropolitan
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museum
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Museum
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 in the
united stats
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United States
 and the British
Museum
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 in the United kingdom that count
approximativelly
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approximately
 the same
amount
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number
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 of visitors,
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moreover
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apply
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the three others have a similar popularity
,
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;
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 to finish
Russia
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, Russia
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 has the least visited gallery. The Louvre is
most
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the most
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 famous and visited
museum
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 of the list in 2011, with just under 9
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millions
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million
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 visitors.
In contrast
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,
It outdo
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it outdoes
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 the second by 3
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millions
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million
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, almost counts the addition of the bottom three of rankings or three times
state
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the state
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 Hermitage figures. The US and UK galleries recorded respectively around 6
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millions
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million
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 visits, which is
two-third
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two-thirds
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 of the top-ranked Louvre and
the
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apply
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double
of
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that of
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 Russia. The
last
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 galleries
has
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have
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 seen around 3
millions
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 tourist walking through their
expositions
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exhibitions
.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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