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A friend you met last year has invited you to visit him/her in his/her country. You have never been there before and need some information before you leave. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: • request some advice about a gift for his/her family • ask about activities and clothing in his/her country • find out about the food

#friend #year #visit #country #information #request #advice #gift #activities #food
Hi Alisa, I hope you
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a good health. I got your letter
last
 month about our next encounter in your country. That's why, I was very happy at that time. As you know well
that
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I have never been to America, so I want to know a few things in advance before my arrival.
Firstly
, what would you like to have from Uzbekistan for yourself and your family? I haven't
meet
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 your family for a long time. That's why, I am not truly aware of their likes. So, I need
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your help. I don't know what the weather is like in America in Autumn, that's why, I decided not to take all my clothes because if I take all my clothes, my suitcase will be heavy and I'm big into American style
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than Uzbekistan. So, I want to buy a lot of clothes from America. When it comes to
food
, I don't care about
food
 because I guess American
food
 is taste. In my opinion, Americans eath more fast
food
. See you super soon. Yours sincerely, Shabnam
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task achievement
Try to be more specific in your request for advice about clothing. Mention specific activities you might do so Alisa can give more tailored advice.
coherence cohesion
Organize your paragraphs better to ensure each contains a single main idea. For example, separate your request for gift advice and questions about activities and clothing into two distinct paragraphs.
task achievement
Your tone is friendly and respectful, which is suitable for writing to a friend.
coherence cohesion
Your greeting and closing are well-done and add a personal touch to your letter.
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