The diagram below shows the changes, which took place in a coastal area called Pentland from 1950 to 2007. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the diagrams below.

The given layout maps illustrate how
a
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the
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coastal
area
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names
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of
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Pentland
renovated
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was renovated
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from 1950 to 2007. We will break down the details below: In 1950, it is noticable that there were just small numbers of buildings and constructions in the
area
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. The main road
led
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that led
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to the sea was surrounded by a large field of grass.
Moreover
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, there were a industrial
area
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on the left
side
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of the main road, and a car park
laid
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lay
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on the other
side
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. They were both connected
with
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to
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the main way by small streets.
On the other hand
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, the layout of the coastal
area
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changed significantly in 2007. The field of tall grass had been cleaned up, and numerous
of
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apply
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houses
,
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and
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entertaining facilities
has
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have
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been built
in
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apply
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here. On the left
side
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of the main street, the instruction has been replaced by
multi-storey
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a multi-storey
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car park, which
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also
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is also
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connected with a swimming pool and a parcel
in
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on
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the North
side
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of it.
In addition
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, the
side
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road
led
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leading
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to the car park in 1950 was closed,
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this
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and this
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area
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has been reconstructed to residental appartments.
Last
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but
nor
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not
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least, they
also
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created a Yacht Marina connecting directly to the sea.
Overall
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, it appears that Pentland has gone
throught
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through
a massive renovation over 57 years with more facilities and houses for its residents

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words area, side with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • coastal area
  • transformation
  • landscape
  • land use
  • infrastructure
  • environmental modifications
  • residential development
  • urban living spaces
  • commercial areas
  • recreational facilities
  • economic landscape
  • green spaces
  • natural habitats
  • urban expansion
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