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Band 2

some people think that student in single-sex schools perform better academically. Others, however, believes that mixed schools provide children with better social skills for adults life. Discuss both of these views and give your opinion.

To start with,
single
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a single
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 boarding campus seems Isolated from other
gender
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genders
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 to interact
, in
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. In
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 my own view and past personal experience i stood with; the option of scholars to be in a
conbined
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combined
 institute,
this
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 will help in academically and their mental health would be in a
balance
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balanced
 state.
First,
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individual institution maybe proper in some certain point of view, some schools may have males only,
for instance
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 catholic institution.
However
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, the individual
section
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sections
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 start from
secondary
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the secondary
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 stage to the top highest level. They are
been reache
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eager
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 to know the holy bible and
also
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, how to teach the human ways of the lord and the
teaching
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teachings
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 of the the lord jesus.
Hence
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, after the single school learning, they will be
honored
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honoured
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 with a degree to practice the way of the lord.
On the other hand
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,
this
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 applies to the rev. Sister's which appears
similary
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similarly
. They have to be in a separate academic institution to
practices
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practice
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task response
Answer both sides of the topic in a clear way. Now, you talk more about one side only.
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Give your opinion in a direct sentence and keep it the same through the essay.
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Use main ideas that fit the topic. Some parts about religion do not link well to school type and adult social skills.
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Add one clear example for each side of the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Make a simple plan: intro, one paragraph for single-sex schools, one paragraph for mixed schools, then conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words like first, however, also, for example, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one idea in one paragraph. Do not change topic in the middle of a paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Write a short conclusion at the end to finish your answer.
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You try to give your own view, which is good for the task.
coherence and cohesion
You use paragraph breaks, and this helps the reader.
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You attempt to compare two kinds of schools.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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