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Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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the growing
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 number of
people
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 with health problems
are
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who are
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 trying
alternative
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 medicines and treatments
instead
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 of visiting their usual doctor has been widely discussed, and it has many positive sides and
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many negative sides.
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 depends on how
people
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 will deal with it. One of the main positive reason of using
alternative
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medicine
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instead
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 of visiting doctors
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 my opinion, is that you will
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 more relaxed than you
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 in
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 regular clinic.
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addition
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 there is a study in 2007
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 that
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among
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 every 15
person
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people
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 around
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the world, there are 4
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who
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 prefer using
alternative
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medecine
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medicine
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 of using medical medecine. More on that
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people
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, people
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also
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 trust in
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medicine
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, because the old genaration trust in the
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medicine
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,
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hand
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that is
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 absulotely there are some negative reasons when
people
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replace
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 between the medical
medicine
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 and the
alternative
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medicine
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. One of the most popular negative
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reasons
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, in my opinion,
people
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used
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use
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 to cancel the visits to their usual doctor,
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 for sure that will cause a lot of
proplem
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problems
 and will bring more patients. Moreforther the
scienets
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scientists
 have been
warining
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warning
people
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 many times in
the lasts
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recent
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 years
of
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about
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 how
is that bad
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bad it is
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 when
people
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 used to
replaced
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replace
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 the medical mediciens with the
alternatve
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alternative
 ones. Moreforther the scienets have
warining
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been warning
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people
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 many times
of
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about
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 using
the
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alternative
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 medicines and treatments for along time. On cnclusion,
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 depends if
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 will replace every usual doctor. Which
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that
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is
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a very
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rong
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wrong
 way. Or they will use the
alternatve
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alternative
 treatments moderately.

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task response
Give a clear answer in the first part. Say if this is mostly positive or mostly negative.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main idea in each body part, and explain it with a simple reason and one clear example.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words in a correct way, like 'First', 'Also', 'However', and 'In conclusion'.
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Do not say both sides only. You must show your own view strongly through the essay.
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Your examples are not very clear or well explained. Add one short and real example.
coherence and cohesion
Check that each sentence follows the last one in a clear order.
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You wrote about both the good side and the bad side of the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, two body parts, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You try to use linking words such as 'On the other hand' and 'In conclusion'.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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