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A museum near your home is looking for people to do part-time voluntary unpaid work. You would like to do some voluntary unpaid work at the museum. Write a letter to the museum director to apply for the voluntary unpaid work. In your letter •Explain why you want to do voluntary unpaid work at the museum •Describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful •Give details of when you would be available for work

Dear Sir, I hope you are doing well. My name is komal and I live in Delhi East. I am writing
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 email regarding a job vacancy. I really want to work at your museum, which is located in East Delhi. I recently saw your volunteer job vacancy in the newspaper.
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, I am keen to work
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in a
museum because when I was in my city, I had a job in the same field before, and I love to explore various historical things. I would like to share my valuable experience with you. I have good communication skills
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 customer handling
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knowledge
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 my work experience, I have a plethora
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ofancient
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 things and their history. As I am a student and currently studying at university. owing to
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, I have free time in the evening from 5:30 to 8:30. Between these
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, I am available to do part time position at your workplace. Please let me know what other things you need
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. I hope to hear from you soon. Your sincerely, Komal.

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts, but add a bit more detail about why you want this work and how your skills fit the museum.
task response
Task response: Use a more clear letter tone. Say you want to apply for the volunteer role, not a job vacancy.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your ideas are in a good order, but some lines are hard to follow because of grammar and word form errors.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Use simple linking words like also, because, and so to join ideas more clearly.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Keep one main idea in each paragraph and check small mistakes in names, time, and closing.
task response
Task response: You cover the three main points: why you want the role, your skills, and your free time.
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Task response: Your work experience and study time give useful support for your application.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: You use paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your ideas.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • volunteer
  • volunteering
  • museum
  • director
  • reason
  • interest
  • support
  • help
  • community
  • learn
  • knowledge
  • history
  • visitors
  • team
  • teamwork
  • communicate
  • speak
  • listen
  • explain
  • guide
  • friendly
  • patient
  • polite
  • reliable
  • punctual
  • careful
  • accurate
  • tidy
  • organise
  • plan
  • tasks
  • events
  • weekends
  • weekday
  • hours
  • availability
  • start
  • date
  • interview
  • reference
  • contact
  • email
  • phone
  • sign up
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