Your friend had a newborn baby. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter -congratulate your friend -explain what the present is and why you chose it -suggest arrangements for a visit

Dear Amy, I hope
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letter finds you well. I am incredibly sorry not to have been in touch recently. My life has been a bit chaotic. I am writing
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letter to congratulate you and David on the birth of your
son
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. I heard from our classmate, Lily, that you had a newborn
son
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last
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month. I feel extremely happy for you, as I know you have been planning to have your
son
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or daughter for a long time. It is like a dream that has come true. I purchased a set of large building blocks as a gift for your
son
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. First of all, I was supposed to buy baby clothing;
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, I did not know what size I should buy, so I decided to buy a toy which is practical and suitable for every baby.
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, playing with LEGO bricks is beneficial to cognitive development. I will take my annual leave next week, so I plan to visit your family if you have time. I know it is slightly inconvenient; if you simply do not have time, I can fully understand, as looking after an infant is particularly overwhelming. Congratulations again. Please let me know when you are available for my visit. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Best wishes, Nian

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts well, but the gift is not fully right for a newborn baby. A soft baby gift may fit better.
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Task response: Your tone is warm and kind, but one or two lines sound a bit formal. Try to sound more natural to a close friend.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your ideas are in a clear order and each part is easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Some link words are good, but you can use simpler links too, like also, so, and because.
task response
Task response: You cover all three points clearly: you congratulate your friend, explain the gift, and suggest a visit.
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Task response: The reason for the gift is clear and easy to understand.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear opening, body, and ending.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Each paragraph has one main idea, so the letter is easy to read.
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