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You are a member of an International Students' club. The club is organising an event to celebrate popular food from around the world. Write a letter to the event organiser, Luis. In your letter offer to make a popular dish from your country describe what this dish is explain why it should be included in the event

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Dear
louis
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Louis
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 , I'm writing to you today because I want to inform you that I would love to be part of the upcoming international event , and I will prepare for
that
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apply
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the famous dish in
morocco
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Morocco
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with
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the
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name
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of
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COUSOUS . It's one of the
popular
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most popular
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 foods in my country . served on
fridays
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Fridays
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, and cooked with
the
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apply
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steamed semolina and
diffrent
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different
 vegetables on the top
sush
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such
 as carrot , tomato ,
zucchini
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and zucchini
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 and often includes tender pieces of beef or chicken . It's much-loved
from
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by
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Moroccan
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moroccan
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Moroccan
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 people and it becoming known worldwide I believe Couscous will be a great addition to the event .
furthermore
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 , It
well
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is well
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 presented ,
also
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 it's both healthy and delicious .
moreover
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 , my participation
with
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in
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this
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 meal will bring attention to Moroccan culture and traditions . Please let's me know if my demand accepted to start preparation for the event , Best regards , Mariam Ch

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coherence and cohesion
Consider varying your sentence structure to enhance the flow of your writing. For example, connecting sentences with conjunctions can improve coherence.
task achievement
Make sure to proofread for spelling and grammatical errors, such as using 'louis' instead of 'Luis' and 'let's' instead of 'let me'. Correct spelling is important for clarity.
task achievement
You've done well to clearly state the dish you want to prepare and provide details about it, showcasing cultural significance.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a friendly tone and maintains a respectful approach throughout, which is suitable for the context.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Enthusiastic
  • Contribution
  • Cuisine
  • Traditional
  • Ingredients
  • Preparation
  • Cultural significance
  • Celebrate
  • Diversity
  • Culinary traditions
  • National dish
  • Occasion
  • Unique attributes
  • Preparation method
  • Gourmet
  • Authentic
  • Flavorful
  • Recipe
  • Event arrangements
  • Showcase
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