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In recent years, many people have adopted a minimalist lifestyle, choosing to own only essential possessions. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this way of living? (

In recent years, many people have chosen to live a minimalist lifestyle, owning
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fewer
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 essential
items
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 and possessions.
This
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 way of living has both advantages and disadvantages. So today I will be talking about
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minimalism's
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the
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 advantages and disadvantages
.
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of minimalism.
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 First of all,
minimalism
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 is great for saving
space
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. Minimalist
peoples'
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people's
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 houses have a lot of free
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, which could be used later on. In my
opinion
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opinion,
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 it’s a wonderful thing to have more living
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, rather than having less living
space
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 and mountains of trash
laying
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lying
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 around your living
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. Another advantage is that minimalists waste less money on unnecessary things like fast fashion. It can both save them a lot of
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 and help them make better financial decisions.
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However
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However,
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 there are
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 some disadvantages to
this
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 lifestyle.
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, the emotional difficulty of having to let go of
items
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. Many
items
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 have sentimental value
and
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, and
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 throwing them out or giving them away to someone can sometimes be stressful and upsetting for some people. Another disadvantage is that
minimalism
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 can sometimes limit comfort or convenience. When people have
less
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fewer
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 things
laying
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lying
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 around, they may not have the
items
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 that are needed in specific situations.
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, if you were needing some old umbrella, because your old one broke, you wouldn’t have it and would get wet In
conclusion
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conclusion,
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minimalism
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 may help you make better financial decisions, but it
also
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 may cause some difficulties in daily life.
Minimalism
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 is great in some ways, but it isn't the most convenient thing to do.

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Answer both sides in a more full way. Add one more clear idea for each side.
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Use more clear and real examples to support your main points.
coherence and cohesion
Keep your ideas in one clear order: topic sentence, explanation, example.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like also, however, for example, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid repeating the same words too much, like living space and things.
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You answered both advantages and disadvantages, so the task is complete.
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Your main ideas are clear and easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You use simple link words well, like first of all, however, and in conclusion.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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