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Some people believe that anyone can create art, such as painting, poetry, music, etc. Others think that a person should have special abilities to create art. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In recent years, there has been a growing debate about whether anyone can create
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 that anyone able to create
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painting
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music
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practising
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poetry because
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task response
Answer both sides in a more clear way. Say why each side may be right, then give your view in a direct way.
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Use main ideas that are easy to follow. Some ideas are hard to understand now.
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Add more clear and real examples to support your points.
coherence and cohesion
Make one idea in one sentence. Now, some sentences are too long and mixed.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple link words well, like First, On the other hand, For example, and In conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Check word order and full stops, so the reader can follow your meaning more easily.
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You answered both views and gave your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
You used an introduction and a conclusion.
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You tried to use examples to support your ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal form of expression
  • inherent aspect
  • specialized skills
  • innate talent
  • specialized training
  • evokes deep emotions
  • resonates
  • folk art
  • street art
  • digital media
  • traditional institutions
  • formal education
  • groundbreaking contributions
  • rigorous training
  • profound art
  • inclusive activity
  • meaningful work
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