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Band 3.5

The graph below show the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The
consumption
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 of fish and
meat
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 in europe in the
year
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 1979 until 2004 showed that the highest
consumption
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 of fish and lamb
meat
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 is in the
year
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 1979 and
that is
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also
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 the
year
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 that chicken
meat
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 is the lowest
consumption
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 and after sometime the
consumption
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 of fish is very steady unlike the lamb
meat
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 that very decreasing in popularity and the chicken that has gain so much consumerity and back again to quite sometime to the
year
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 1984 being the highest
consumption
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 of beef that
also
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 been decreasing over the
year
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, meat, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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