The table shows independent film releases by genre in the UK and the Republic of Ireland in 2012.

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The table illustrates the data about the movie premieres sorted by genre in
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Kingdom and
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the Republic
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of Ireland in 2012.
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, the genres with
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releases were
comedy
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,
drama
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and
documentary
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neither
drama
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nor
documentary
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films brought as much revenue as
comedy
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and horror. Beginning with
comedy
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, which accounted for 26 unveilings, consisting 17.6% of all
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.
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,
drama
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and
documentary
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had 35 debuts
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each, both of them representing 23.6%.
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to these significant figures, biopic, crime, action, romance and others accounted for 1, 7, 4, 5 and 8, respectively, all of them were less than 6% of all launches. There were
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horror and thriller movies
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about 13 and 9%. When it comes to income made from ticket sales,
comedy
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had an absolute dominant rate, reaching almost 46%, followed by horror films
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approximately 20%.
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, crime, action,
documentary
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, thriller, romance and other
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genres brought
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less than 5%,
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whereas
biopic and
drama
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accounted for more than 8%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast".
Vocabulary: Replace the words comedy, drama, documentary with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • The table illustrates
  • data on
  • independent film releases
  • by genre
  • in the UK and Republic of Ireland
  • highest number of releases
  • most popular genre
  • second most popular
  • significant number of releases
  • relatively fewer releases
  • lowest number of releases
  • overall
  • common genres
  • substantial presence
  • moderate number of releases
  • least number of releases
  • provides insights into
  • distribution of
  • across different genres
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