J. You have unexpectedly come into a large sum of money and you want to share this good news with your friend. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter ● explain where the money came from ● say what you intend to do with the money ● invite your friend to celebrate your good fortune. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ___________,

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Dear Doane, I want to tell you
about a
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wonderful news about me. I got twenty thousand Canadian dollars cheque in my
mail box
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mailbox
yesterday. Actually, my grandfather
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lives in Nova Scotia, owns multiple acres of
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over there. On his recent birthday, he sold one of his
land
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and distributed its profit to all his
grand children
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grandchildren
. My
grand father
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grandfather
wants me to use
this
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money
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for my better future. Honestly, I don’t have any idea
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how
should I
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spend
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money
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. Should
go
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for
long term
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long-term
investment in
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the stock
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market or buy
crypocurrency
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cryptocurrency
to make quick profits? I am
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thinking
to buy
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a new car with
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money
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, but I am not sure exactly which one is
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a good
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option for me. I have planned a dinner with my
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friends and cousins
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this
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Saturday
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April 20. I want you to come and join
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celebration
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could
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discuss how to manage
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money
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. I am waiting for your reply. Warm Regards, Jay

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task response
For task response: answer each point in a more clear way. Say where the money came from, what you will do, and invite your friend in a direct way.
task response
For task response: keep the tone warm and natural. Some parts sound a bit unsure, so add more clear plans.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: link ideas with simple words like and, so, because, and also.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: make each paragraph hold one main idea only. This will make the letter easier to follow.
task response
For task response: you covered all three bullet points from the task.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: the letter has a clear opening, body, and ending.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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