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You are going on holiday next week and you need to ask your friend to watch your dog while you are away. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, • state how long you will be away • tell them what needs to be done • state how you will compensate them

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Dear Doane, I’m writing to ask you about taking
care
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 of
Tomy
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, my dog, for
next
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the next
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 whole week as I have to go out
due to
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 work. My company is sending me
Texas
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to Texas
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, the United
State
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 of America
in
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, in
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 order to attend the work conference. Often, my sister takes
care
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 of
Tomy
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 when I am out of town, but she is
also
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 out of town
during
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at the
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 same time.I want
to
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apply
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you
take
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to take
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care
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Tomy
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of Tomy
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 from
this
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 Sunday evening to next Friday morning
,
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.
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 I will be back on next Friday morning. You have to make sure that his water bowl is full and give him his
ready to eat
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ready-to-eat
 dog food twice a day. I often take him out for a walk in
evening
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the evening
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 to the park near my home, you will like to play with him in
park
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the park
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. You can stay at my home for a week and make your food here. I will pay you fifty dollars a day for taking
care
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 of
Tomy
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and
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 we will go for
a
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apply
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dinner when I get back on Friday
,
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 It’s a treat on me. I am waiting for your reply. Warm Regards, Jay

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task response
Say your time away in one clear way. Now you say it two times and it is a bit hard to follow.
task response
Use a more natural tone in some lines, like 'Could you look after my dog?'
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with easy words like 'also', 'so', and 'because' to make the letter flow better.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each paragraph for one main point only, so it is easier to read.
task response
You answer all parts of the task: time, dog care, and payment.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear opening and ending.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas are in a good order overall.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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