Topic: many people use distance-learning programs (study materials, the internet, and so on) to study at home, but some think that it cannot bring the same benefits of attending school, college or university. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? (250-350 words)

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Since
Covid-19 effected
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the whole world, remote-study has become a crucial part of study.
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I agree that studying from home helps the students to eliminate travel time, I believe that the demerits outweigh the merits,as in-class activities and hands-on learning
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more meaningful life experiences. Studying through online available materials
such
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as textbooks, articles
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,
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or online lectures, has solved the issue of travelling on
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basis. It saves the time, money, and energy of students.
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, the public transportation, roads
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apply
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,
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and schools
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become less crowded and the individuals
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pursuing
education can study
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sitting
at their comfort place.
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, distance-learning comes
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several disadvantages. Online classes
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fail
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to provide
hands-on
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a hands-on
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learning experience.
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culinary student cannot become a chef without
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cooking skills in
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the kitchen
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.
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, schooling
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not only provides knowledge to students, but it
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teaches them to
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good
citizen
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citizens
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of a country, by educating the learners about kind and helpful behaviour. So, getting
education
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from home can never be as good as physical classes.
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, I strongly believe that despite being economic, remote-learning brings a number of drawbacks in the form of
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of guidance regarding general behaviour in society
as well as
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practical skill development.

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task response
Answer the question more fully. You say you agree, but your view is not fully clear all through the essay.
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Add one more clear idea about why home study is good or bad, and explain it more.
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Use a more direct example to support each main point.
coherence and cohesion
Make some ideas link more smoothly. A few sentences feel sudden.
coherence and cohesion
Check paragraph topic sentences. Make the main point of each body paragraph very clear.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words carefully, with correct commas and spacing.
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You answer the topic and give a clear opinion in the introduction and end.
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You include a real and easy-to-understand example about a culinary student.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
Each paragraph has one main idea.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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