Many people are choosing a minimalist lifestyle, owning only essential items and avoiding excess possessions. What are the advantages and disadvantages of living in this way?

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people are choosing a minimalistic
lifestyle
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. But what are the advantages and disadvantages of
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lifestyle
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? The first advantage is that
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lifestyle
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is one of the ways of stopping overconsumption.
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, the
person
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decides to change his life and become
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a minimalist
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. He stops buying clothes from fast fashion brands and maybe
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goes to a
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second-hand
store.
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way less clothes end up in landfills, because people are not buying clothes from fast fashion brands. The second advantage is that houses become cleaner and easier to move around
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, the
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is living in an untidy house
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because he doesn’t know where to put all his stuff. But
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, he decides to change his life and starts cleaning up, sorting his belongings and throwing unnecessary items out. The house becomes tidier
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also
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the
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's mind becomes cleaner, because he has
cleaner
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a cleaner
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space to live in.
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, sometimes minimalistic homes don't show a
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's personality.
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, if the
person
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is a really big minimalist, he doesn’t keep anything
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not necessary for living. His house feels empty and boring. In conclusion, a minimalist
lifestyle
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is good for the planet, and stopping overconsumption,
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however
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you should remember that it is your home
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if you want to make it look like
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you,
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it’s fine to keep some of your possessions.

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Answer both sides more fully. You write about good and bad points, but the bad side has only one short idea.
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Add one more clear disadvantage, such as less comfort or less personal style, to make your answer more complete.
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Make your ideas a little deeper. Some points are clear, but they need more detail to feel complete.
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