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Some people say a good diet and regular exercise are not necessary for a long and healthy life. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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A number of
people
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 believe that a well-balanced
diet
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 and regular exercise do not need to be a long and healthy life. I firmly disagree with the given statement. My inclination is elaborated in ensuring paragraphs and relevant examples
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, some individuals counterclaim the mentioned support. The foremost argument is that a small number of communities can live longer even though
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 they neither do any exercises nor follow a nutritious
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.
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,
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 is primarily true, but it is mainly because of the role of genetics. Because a small number of
people
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 tend to be fit, slim, and they will not gain any weight, which means they are less in danger from obesity, high blood viscosity and other diseases.
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, all these diseases come from a lack of activity and an unhealthy
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.
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, it is
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 true that others rely on medicine, which has found a treatment for almost every illness. If medicine can manage
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 regular bad habits do not make a big impact as they did once.
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, individuals do not need to stay active and can eat and relax as much as they need.
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 there are some good counterarguments, I still side with the
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 who disagree with the given topic. The main argument to justify my stand is that diets built around processed food and excess sugar often lead to a sedentary lifestyle. Even little activities
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 as walking and stretching can prevent
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 habits. Even more, if individuals stay active, their sleep will be improved, have clearer thinking and a more stable mood. The other reason to prove my point is that regular activities not only help
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 now, but
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 it shows its benefits , especially when they become elders. Since
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they are elders, they complain about their aches and pains , which can be avoided by doing exercises.
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 the discussion, it can be said that despite the fact that some
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 are born with the skill of not gaining weight and as medicine develops , more right
diet
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 and exercises are not needed, my reasons,
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 as even though the easiest activity ,
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 as walking, can prevent a sedentary lifestyle , and
people
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 can get better in their old ages, are acceptable

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task response
Write your idea in a more direct way. Say clearly that you disagree, and keep this same view in all body parts.
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Add one or two clear examples from real life or common life. This will make your points stronger.
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Explain each main point more fully. Some ideas are good, but they stop too soon.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clearer plan: introduction, one body part for the other side, one body part for your side, then conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas in a simple and smooth way. Some sentences jump too fast from one point to another.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid repeating the same idea about old age and health. Build one point, then move to the next point.
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You answer the question and give a clear opinion: you disagree.
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You include both sides of the topic, which helps show a full answer.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body parts, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You use basic link words like 'however', 'besides', and 'to conclude'.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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