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The graph shows the export of thousand of cars in Uzbekistan between 2014 and 2019.

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The graph illustrates the export of many cars in Uzbekistan from 2014 to 2019.
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, the amount of
exports
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 A and
B
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 significantly fluctuated and reached peaks in 2018. In 2014, the bulk of
exports
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 of
B
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 reached 225
million
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,
while
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 the number of
exports
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 of A was below 200
million
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. In the following years, the average of
exports
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B
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 increased to 250 lots. At the same time, the measure of
exports
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 of A rapidly declined to 150
million
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. Despite dropping in 2015, the number of
exports
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 significantly increased to 275
million
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 ,
while
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 the number of
exports
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B
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 decreased to 200
million
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 in 2016.
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, in 2017, they swapped places
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 the average of
exports
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 A and
B
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 amounted to 175
million
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 and 275
million
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 , in terms.
Finally
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, in 2018, both of them reached their peak with 300
million
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 and 325
million
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 , respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words exports, b, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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