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The map shows the present layout of an post building and plans for its future redevelopment.

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The given map displays the main changes that took place in the
Office
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 Building between
Present
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the present
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 time and
Future
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the future
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 time.
Overall
Linking Words
,
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Office
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the Office
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 Building undergo significant changes to become a more
modernize
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modernised
 equipment and facilities plan which will attract design
compare
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compared
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 to
present
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the present
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 ones. Present
Office
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 Building,
to
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on
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 the left
side
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,
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entrance
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the entrance
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 start with
Grass
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. Middle of the map, stay for
walking
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the walking
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 path. On the
right
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side
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 of
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the entrance
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entrance
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entrance,
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 the total four
Office
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 rooms
have locate
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are located
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. On the
oppose
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opposite
side
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 of the
entrance
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 Kitchen, Canteen and Storeroom are located. Close to
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office
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the office
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room
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 another
entrance
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held
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was held
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. On the
right
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side
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 of
second
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the second
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entrance
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 has locate
an
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apply
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another
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Grass
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grassy
 place. Between
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Grass
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the grass
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 and stroeroom have small
Wc
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WC
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room
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 for everyone. Future plan of
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Office
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the Office
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 Building, the majority of facilities will be relocated or newly added. Starting with
entrance
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 one remaning same
but
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, but
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Grass
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the grass
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 will be removed
instead
Linking Words
 of
this
Linking Words
 Outdoor seat area
and
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, and
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 chairs will be added. On the left
side
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 of
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entrance
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the entrance
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, two
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Office
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office rooms
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room
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 will be built and
storeroom
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the storeroom
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remaining
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will remain the
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 same. The second
entrance
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 will be newly constructed in the middle of
map
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the map
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. On the
right
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side
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side,
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 two
storeroom
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storage rooms
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 still
remaining
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remain
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.
To
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On
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 the
right
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side
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,
Coffee
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a coffee
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 machine and
new
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a new
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 meeting
will
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room will
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 be added with
small
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a small
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 WC
room
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Vocabulary: Replace the words office, side, entrance, grass, right, room with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • map
  • present
  • future
  • plan
  • building
  • post office
  • area
  • space
  • room
  • entrance
  • exit
  • door
  • window
  • car park
  • parking
  • yard
  • road
  • path
  • sign
  • counter
  • desk
  • staff
  • customer
  • service
  • work
  • time
  • crowd
  • line
  • bigger
  • new
  • old
  • safe
  • easy
  • clear
  • open
  • bright
  • design
  • build
  • change
  • improve
  • add
  • extend
  • phase
  • cost
  • traffic
  • noise
  • safety
  • access
  • people
  • move
  • area
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