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It is necessary for parents to attend parenting training courses to bring their children up. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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It is compulsory for
parents
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 to attend
training
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a training
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 course to bring their children up . Do you agree or disagree with
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reason
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a reason
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this
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 reason for your own intelligence or incident. Parenting
course
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courses
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 can provide
usefull
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useful
 knowledge and skills . Many new
parents
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 do not have experience , so they feel confused about how to handle their child's behaviour , health or education. Training programs can teach them about child development , communication and decipline method. Not all
parents
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 need training. It is a natural process
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 many people learn it from their own
parents
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. In many cultures ,
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 in countries like India .
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 family helps in raising their children. So formal courses may not be required. Conclusion - it is beneficial
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, especially
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 for new or struggling
parents
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 , but
they
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 should not be compulsory.
Parents
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 can
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 raise their children successfully with love , support and guidance from family and society .

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Give a clear answer in the first line. Say if you agree or disagree.
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Add one more main idea and explain it more.
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Use a real or clear example to support your idea.
coherence and cohesion
Write full sentences for the ending, not only a note word like conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like first, also, however, and in the end.
coherence and cohesion
Make each body part about one main point and add one or two support lines.
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Your main idea is clear: courses can help, but they should not be a must.
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You gave two sides of the topic, which is good for this task.
coherence and cohesion
Your writing has a simple order: idea, other side, ending.
coherence and cohesion
You used some linking words like so and but.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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