The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

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The chart displays
Use synonyms
number
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the number
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of stores that
was close
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were closed
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and
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number
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the number
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of new shops was open in one specific country from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
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, both stores that closed and opened
were decrease
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decreased
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throughout the period. It can be seen that in 2015,
which
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there
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was the lowest
number
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of closing shops. In detail, by 2011
was
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,
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the highest
number
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ever of opening stores
nearly
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was nearly
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above
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apply
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8000
shop
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shops
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, and after that
in
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, in
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2012, showed a
sharply
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sharp
decrease
almost
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of almost
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4000
shop
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shops
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,which is
much less
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apply
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around a double
than
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of
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2011.
In addition
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, after 2012 ,
began
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it began
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to increase gradually until 2013
,
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;
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however
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, the year after that declined again
, in
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. From
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2014 to 2017,
it's remined
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it remained
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relatively
unchange
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unchanged
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.
On the other hand
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, closing shops by 2011 until 2014,which was
flauctued
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fluctuated
for around 4 years peroid, but in 2015, there was a significant decline, but after a year started to rise
up dramaticly
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dramatically
, between 2017
until
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and
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2018,
it's remain
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it remained
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steady.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • surge
  • stabilize
  • correlation
  • economic conditions
  • consumer behavior
  • technological advancements
  • urban development
  • employment
  • retail sector
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