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The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999. ▪️Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The
below
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line graph below
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Line
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shows
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graph
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 show visits by
the
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apply
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UK
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residents
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to
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apply
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abroad and overseas visitors to
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UK
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the UK
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 from
year
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apply
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1979 to 1999 in
millions
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, and
Bar
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the bar
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graph
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 depicts the
UK
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residents
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 5 favourite destination countries for
year
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the year
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 1999 (in
millions
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).
Overall
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,
Both
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both
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 the Trends in
Line
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the line
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graph
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shows
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show
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 continuous growth
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while
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, while
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number
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the number
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 of
UK
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residents
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 travelling outside is always above than the Tourists to
UK
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. For
Bar
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the bar
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graph
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graph,
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 France
were
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was
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 the
on top with
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apply
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most favoured location of
UK
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residents
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 abroad
and
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, and
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 Turkey
on
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was
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 the
bottom
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least favoured
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. In 1979, Visits to and from from
UK
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 has almost same number with around 10
millions
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 people moving forward there is slow rise till 1984 upto 20
millions
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 for
UK
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 population travelling foreign and approximate 15
millions
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 for incoming traveller from the world to
UK
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, futhermore, after 1984 till 1999 the numbers surged up
while
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 outgoing travel has more increase than the the incoming travel both reaches upto 50
millions
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UK
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 resident to other country and 25 million other citizens to
UK
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.
UK
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residents
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has
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have
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 five locations for vacations in
1999
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1999,
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in which
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with
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 France at
peak
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its peak
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 with 11
millions
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 and Turkey
on
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in the
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 valley with only 2
millions
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additionally
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 three countries are
also
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 there with 3,4,9
millions
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 tourist of
UK
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 in the Greece,
USA
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the USA
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,
Spain
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and Spain
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respectively
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, respectively
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, uk, residents, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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