Human activity has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe actions can be taken to bring about a change.

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opinions regarding
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the damage people have done to plants and animals can be salvaged or not. For the most
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I think the effects we caused are so
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permanent
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that it would be almost
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impossible
to reverse them.
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, if people change some habits,
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scientists work on reproducing them, we might see an important difference. On one hand, there are countless species of
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organisms
that have gone extinct and are in that process, all because of our doing.
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has been a result of our way of living and habits,
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people have grown heavily
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it complicated for
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to entertain the idea of humans
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rearranging
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lifestyle
in order to save them. By
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, I mean to explain how challenging it would be for a large part of the
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population
to
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agree on implementing similar changes. 
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, in
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years there have been huge advances on artificila reproduction to save plants
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animals. Considering they are esential factor in the world working and human living
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a comfortable life as we are, we should
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absolutely
make the change and do our part.
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, I think we should work on the visibility of
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issue, making it more urgent
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we start improving soon. In conclusion,

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Answer both sides more fully. Say more about why change is not possible and why it is possible.
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Give one clear example for each main idea. This will make your ideas stronger.
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Write a full conclusion. Your last line is not finished, so the essay feels incomplete.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear topic sentences at the start of each body paragraph. This helps the reader follow your plan.
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Link ideas with simple words like first, also, however, and as a result.
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Develop each main point more. Some ideas are interesting, but they stop too soon.
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You clearly show your opinion in the introduction.
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Your essay has a basic paragraph plan with two main sides.
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You stay on the topic of plants and animals all the way through.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • negative impact
  • extinct
  • deforestation
  • pollution
  • habitat destruction
  • mitigate
  • reverse
  • stricter regulations
  • protected areas
  • endangered species
  • education and awareness campaigns
  • biodiversity
  • consequences
  • renewable energy sources
  • organic farming
  • eco-tourism
  • environmental regulations
  • sustainable practices
  • natural ecosystems
  • preserve biodiversity
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