Human activity has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe actions can be taken to bring about a change.

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Introduction
Human activity has negatively affected plants and
animals
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all around the world. Some
people
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think that the damage cannot be changed anymore,
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others believe that there is still time to improve the situation. In
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essay, I will discuss both opinions and give my own view.
Body · 1
On one hand, many
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believe that
humans
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have already caused too much damage to nature. Every year, more forests are cut down
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more
animals
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lose their natural habitats. Pollution in rivers and oceans
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affects many species.
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, climate change is causing extreme temperatures, fires, and floods in different countries. Because of
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, some
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think it is too late to fix
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problems. They believe that even if some try to help, others will continue polluting and destroying the environment.
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On the other hand
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, other
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think that the situation can still improve if
humans
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change their habits. Even
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the damage is serious, there are still many
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trying to help the environment in simple ways.
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, some
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recycle, stop wasting water, or use less plastic in their dairy life. I
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think that younger generations are more aware of these problems than before. Little by little,
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are understanding that nature is important and that
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and plants need protection. Because of
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, I believe that small actions from many
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can create positive changes over time.
Conclusion
In my opinion, I believe that the situation can still change if
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become more responsible.
Humans
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created many environmental problems, so
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can
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help solve them. If more
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work together and care about the planet, there is still hope for plants,
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and future generations.

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task response
For task response, your view is clear, and you talk about both sides. To get a higher score, add one or two more clear and real examples.
task response
For task response, some ideas are good but still a bit general. Try to explain why your points are true in a deeper way.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, your essay is easy to follow and the order is good. To get a higher score, link some ideas more smoothly inside each paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, be careful with small word errors like 'this problems', 'even thought', and 'dairy life', because they can make reading less smooth.
task response
For task response, you answer the full question and give your own view clearly.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, your essay has a clear start, body, and end.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, words like 'On one hand', 'On the other hand', and 'In my opinion' help guide the reader well.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • negative impact
  • extinct
  • deforestation
  • pollution
  • habitat destruction
  • mitigate
  • reverse
  • stricter regulations
  • protected areas
  • endangered species
  • education and awareness campaigns
  • biodiversity
  • consequences
  • renewable energy sources
  • organic farming
  • eco-tourism
  • environmental regulations
  • sustainable practices
  • natural ecosystems
  • preserve biodiversity
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