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Double direct questions Nowadays more tasks at home and work are being performed by robots. Why do you think this happening? Is it a positive or negative development

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Robotics increasingly play a role both in the home and the workplace.
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 is
due to
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 advancements in
technology
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and
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 it should be seen as a positive development because it reduces a person`s workload.In
the
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apply
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recent years
home
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, home
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 and workload exercise becoming by
robots
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. On the one hand,environmental places
such
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mall
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malls
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,attractions and museums are known
by inventions
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for innovations
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present
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the present
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 day. Numbers of
robots
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enhance
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is increasing
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 even
at
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in
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 educational
centers
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centres
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.
In
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 some
point
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point,
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 it can be seen as
determential
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detrimental
 factors.
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,for pupils
led
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apply
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to take attention from study lessons.
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 ,spending
time
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more time
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 more in internet standing different
type
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types
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 of
diveces
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devices
.It can
be led
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lead to addiction
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 to be addictive from any type of
technology
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, so
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so that disregard
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disregarding
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 invaluable tuition .In my
opinion
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opinion,
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 it has only one
reasons
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reason
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 for that ,
it
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 they don’t have what to do.Indeed ,they just waste time by
taking
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having
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 fun
how
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as
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 they
called
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call
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.Society
include that
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 being addicten by internet normall thing .
Imersive
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Immerse
 yourself by present day.
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,to
begun
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begin
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 with
individuals
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,
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 some
of them
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individuals
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 depended
their
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on artificial intelligence for their
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 whole life
to the artificial intelligence
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apply
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to ensure everything would be done
while
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 rushing out
from
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of
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 their job.
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,
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adults didn’t
noticed
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notice
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 the consequences of using
robots
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 .If metal tech will be declined from gear.
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 to fix all
mechanic
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mechanics
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 will be impossible .
Scientest
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Scientists
 should take
control
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apply
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all precautions
in
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; in
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 other
ways
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ways,
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 governments should ensure
equipment
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that equipment
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with
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is equipped with
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 appropriate items.
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 ,from contemporary
time
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times
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 we can include different changes to our planet. By exploring useful
robots
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. Which will not only replace
humanity
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 gradually
will
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, but also
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 make non ability of humans
entity
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an entity
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.
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, researching
galaxy
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galaxies
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,exploring neutrons to save
human
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the human
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 body and health treatments.Many people
belive
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believe
 that
,
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apply
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robots
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 would replace
humanity
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 and would destroy the
all
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apply
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essence,
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however
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however,
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 I would argue that if individuals
would
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truly maintained all of the
technology
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including
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, including
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ai
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AI
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,
robots
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,
artificial
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and artificial
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apps
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apps,
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 we would make the most useful impact
to
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on
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humanity
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 .By chasing our own
life
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life,
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 we couldn’t
belive
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believe
 that in 21th center some sort of people already live in
worst
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the worst
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 situation. Suffering from less food ,water,and even less being
fee
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free
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.So
that
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apply
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I think people should take care
more
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apply
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of that kind of person.Investing
them with
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in
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 correct inventions and exploring comfort life for
children`s
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children
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 because of
humans
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human
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 mistakes naïve
peoples
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people
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 suffer. In conclusion,I firmly
belive
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believe
 that if
humanity
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would
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were to
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 use modern
technology
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 with mature
intelligence
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intelligence,
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 we
can
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could
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 make our world even one
percent
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per cent
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 better with
right
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the right
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people`s
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people
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.
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 ,we would
far
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be far
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 from bad
newses
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news
 and guarantee peaceful freedom for everyone with modern inventions.

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task response
Answer both questions more directly. Say clearly why robots are used more, and say clearly why this is good or bad.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main idea in each paragraph. Now many ideas are mixed, so your point is hard to follow.
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Use simple examples that match the topic. Some examples now are not close to home and work robots.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with easy words like first, also, for example, however, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Make each body paragraph support your opinion. Do not add ideas that do not help your main answer.
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Explain your ideas more. After each main point, add one short reason and one clear example.
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You give a clear opinion that robots are mostly a positive development.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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You try to discuss both good and bad sides before giving your view.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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