The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

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The provided chart illustrates the proportion of households renting and owning accommodation in two UK regions over a 93-year period from 1918 to 2011.
Overall
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it is clear that
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home ownership experienced a significant upward trend,
while
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the percentage of people renting accommodation declined over the period. By the end of the timeframe, owning a home became more common than renting. In 1918, households in rented accommodation
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the dominant leader at approximately 78%
while
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home ownership was at just under 25%.
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, these
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started to shrink gradually until they reached
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the same figure in 1971, accounting for 50%. After 1971
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, the proportion of households owning experienced a significant increase and reached nearly 70% in 2001 before dropping to about 65%
at the end
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of the period. Regarding
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rental sector, the figure declined slightly
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it saw the lowest proportion of just above 30% in 2001 before rising to nearly 35% in 2011.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • tenancy
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • proportion
  • residence
  • dwelling
  • shift
  • transition
  • migration
  • fluctuate
  • stabilize
  • rise
  • fall
  • increase
  • decrease
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