The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food resturants between 2003 and 2013.

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The provided bar chart depicts
that
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how regularly the citizens of America consume junk food in different places from 2003 to 2013.
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, in the
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the ratio of eating food daily was very low
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with the passage of
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it
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increased

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