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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan

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The line graph illustrates the
number
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 of
shops
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 in a specific county that closed and opened from the period of 2011 to 2018.
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,the graph is experiencing a fluctuation move both the closures and openings shop are decreasing throughout the years. In terms of opening
shops
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, in
2011
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2011,
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 the numbers were at a peak of more than 8000
shops
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.
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,within a
year
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year,
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 the
number
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 of
shops
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 decreased to 4000. In 2015, the opening
shops
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 were higher than the closing. In 2018, the
number
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 of
shops
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 opening reached the lowest volume witch is 3000.
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, the highest
number
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 of shop closures was in 2013 were it reached slightly above 7000. Yet, in 2015, the numbers dramatically decreased to less than 1000.
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, over the years , the
closing
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number of closed
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shops
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were
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 significantly increasing.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, shops with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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