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The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The charts
provides
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provide
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 key information about
public
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the public
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 library in
city
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the city
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 called Little Chafont. The units are measured in per cent and figures.
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Overall
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Overall,
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 it is clear
frome
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from
 the graph that the majority of the members
above
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are between
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 18
to
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and
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 64.
In addition
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, young and and adulit above 65
approximately are
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are approximately
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 the same,
whereas
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children
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they
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apply
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have almost
same
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the same
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 number.
According to
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 what
showen
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is shown
, 51
person
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per cent
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 of the people who attend the library
between
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are between
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 18
to
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and
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 64.
Moreover
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, under 18 and above 65 almost have the same
rate
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 of
individauls
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individuals
 12 to 15.
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Furthermore
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Furthermore,
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children
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almost
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apply
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have the second
most
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largest
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 number of members
withe
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with
 22 per year. In terms of loans category,
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Children
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children's
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 and adult fiction have
took
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taken
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 the
most
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highest
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rate
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which
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, which
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 is 38 per cent.
Whereas
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 with
non fiction
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non-fiction
 for
the
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apply
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children
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because
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,
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 it is very
tiny
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low
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rate
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 with 6
rate
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. For adult books and DVDs for young
people
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people,
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 it is between 2 to 1 per cent
respectivly
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respectively
.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words children, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overall
  • in general
  • the most
  • the least
  • higher
  • lower
  • rise
  • fall
  • increase
  • drop
  • share
  • number
  • rate
  • group
  • age
  • men
  • women
  • books
  • children
  • adult
  • more than
  • less than
  • about the same
  • compared with
  • while
  • whereas
  • accounted for
  • made up
  • remained stable
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