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Increasing car uses in many global cities has caused a number of problems. Some cities have proposed banning private vehicles from the city centre. To what extent, do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
Nowadays,
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 using
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car
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a car
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 daily is
most
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the most
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way
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common way
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 to
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and
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 the comminuty coming between agree and disagree. I disagree with
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 on the
car
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uses only
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for several reasons imapct on
individuals
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 and society, and
this
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 essay will explain my point of view.
Body paragraph 1
Firstly
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, using
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car
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a car
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 can be harmful
for the
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to
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individuals
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. Because
,
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transition
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 close to
thier
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their
 homes by
car
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 only can increase the overweight
percents
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percentages
 and health problems. For
instanse
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instance
, walking on foot to the
super market
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supermarket
 or pharmacy
neer
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near
 the home has a
benifical
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beneficial
 effect on the
individuals
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, like
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losing
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 some calories and
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 Vitamin D, freedom from thinking and decrease the strees.
Body paragraph 2
Secondly
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, Other reason make me disagree with
car
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uses
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use
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 is the
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apply
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impact on the socity. Because
,
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apply
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 using
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car
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a car
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 is one of the
traffic proplem reason
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reasons for the traffic problem
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.
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 the daily
crowed
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crowd
, huge number of
accsidants
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accidents
,
traffic
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and traffic
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 fighting.
Conclusion
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,
In
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in
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opinion
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opinion,
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car
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uses
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use
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 has a cons
imapct
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impact
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individuals
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 and society.
Sush
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Such
 as lost money and energies, and the other reasons i refer it before. I
beilive
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believe
 that we can depend
in
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waies
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ways
 like
,
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the
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 metro,
busses
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buses
,
walking
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and walking
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which
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, which
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 can impact benifically on
the
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apply
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individuals
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 and society.

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task response
Answer the question more directly. Say clearly why you disagree with a ban, or why you support other ways more.
task response
Keep your main idea the same in all parts. At times, your essay moves from city centre bans to general car use.
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Add one clear example about city centres, such as traffic, air, or bus use in one city.
coherence and cohesion
Use one main idea in each body paragraph, then explain it and give one example.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like First, Also, For example, As a result, and In conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence order and word form so the reader can follow your meaning more easily.
task response
You give a clear opinion in the introduction and again in the conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a basic structure: introduction, two body parts, and conclusion.
task response
You try to support your ideas with simple examples like walking to nearby places.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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