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Nowadays, most scientific research is funded and conducted by private companies, rather than government. Do the advantages of this situation outweighs its disadvantages?

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Introduction
These days, private companies provide
fund
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funding
 for scientific research
instead
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 of governments.
Although
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this
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 trend has some drawbacks, I believe the advantages outweigh the disadvantages because
governmnets
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governments
 can invest their money in other sectors, like healthcare and education.
Conclusion
To recapitulate, even though
this
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 has some drawbacks, including their own rules and regulations, I believe the benefits outweigh the drawbacks,
such
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 as
government
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the government
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 can spend its money
to
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on
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 other sectors
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such
Punctuation problem
, such
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ad
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as
 transportation and healthcare.

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coherence cohesion
Write more than two short parts. Add one clear start, one or two body parts, and one end.
task achievement
Answer both sides of the question. Show one disadvantage and two or more advantages with clear support.
coherence cohesion
Use simple link words like first, also, however, and in the end.
task achievement
Give one real or clear example, like money for schools or hospitals.
task achievement
Your main idea is clear: you think the good side is stronger.
coherence cohesion
You have an ending line that repeats your opinion.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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