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The graph below gives information on the differences in clothing exports from three different countries from 1999 to 2003.

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The given line chart indicates the change in the number of clothing
exports
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 in Colombia, Japan and Myanmar over the
period
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 of five years between 1999 and 2003. It can be seen from the graph that Myanmar experienced a dramatic surge in clothing
exports
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, outpacing the more modest growth observed in Colombia,
while
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 Japan saw a notable decline over the
period
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. In terms of the differences
clothing
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in clothing
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exports
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 in Myanmar, there was a significant increase in
how many
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clothing
exports
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 during the
period
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 from 1999 to 2001.
However
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, between 2001 and 2002, the prices of clothing
exports
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 decreased rapidly from 950
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millions
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 to 320
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millions
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million
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dollars
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. And for one
year
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, they climbed slightly again. Regarding Japan’s data, clothing
exports
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 changed fluctuatingly during a
period
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 of five years. The changes
clothing
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in clothing
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exports
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 fell slowly for one
year
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. Until 2000, they rose again and peaked in 2001. Clothing
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exports
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export
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 prices dropped sharply from 600
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millions
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million
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dollars
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 to 495
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millions
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million
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dollars
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 in the following
year
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. In terms of Colombia’s information, how many clothing
exports
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 went up quickly from 480
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millions
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million
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 to 700
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millions
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million
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dollars
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 between 1999 and 2002
.
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 The clothing
exports
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 witnessed a decrease for one
year
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words exports, period, millions, dollars, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • clothing exports
  • country
  • highest
  • lowest
  • rise
  • rise steadily
  • increase
  • fall
  • decrease
  • grow
  • drop
  • change
  • stay the same
  • peak
  • reach a peak
  • hit a high
  • gap
  • difference
  • big gap
  • narrow gap
  • widen gap
  • compared with
  • in contrast to
  • whereas
  • over the period
  • from ... to ...
  • trend
  • pattern
  • overall
  • in general
  • year
  • data
  • show
  • indicate
  • point out
  • lead
  • lead in exports
  • top country
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