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The charts shows air pollution levels by different causes among four countries in 2021. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart illustrates the levels of air
pollution
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, measured in parts per million (
PPM
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), produced by three sources,
electricity
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 generation,
transport
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, and
industry
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 across four countries
namely
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China
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, America, Japan, and Australia
in
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 2021.
Overall
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,
China
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 recorded the highest
pollution
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 levels across all three categories,
while
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 Australia was the least polluting nation.
Industry
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 was the dominant source of
pollution
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 in
China
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 and Japan,
whereas
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transport
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 was the leading cause in America.
China
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 stood out as the most severely affected country, with industrial
pollution
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 reaching approximately 80
PPM
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 — the highest figure in the entire chart.
Transport
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 and
electricity
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 generation contributed around 70
PPM
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 and 58
PPM
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respectively
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.
In contrast
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, Australia had the most balanced and lowest
pollution
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 levels, with all three sources recording roughly 18–20
PPM
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 America presented a notably different pattern, where
transport
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 (approximately 58
PPM
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) significantly outweighed both
electricity
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 generation and
industry
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 (around 30
PPM
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 each). Japan followed a similar trend to
China
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, with
industry
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 being its largest contributor at roughly 42
PPM
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, followed by
transport
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 at 30
PPM
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 and
electricity
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 at only 15
PPM
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pollution, ppm, electricity, transport, industry, china with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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