Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Education remains a perennial topic in society, captivating widespread interest and discussion. I concur with the notion that it is pivotal for university
students
to make wise decisions on whether they want to spend all their time
on their main subjects
. In my opinion, both
sides of view are backed with valid supporting points, this
essay will discuss both
these points.
For young individuals in university, learning broadly and learning beyond their main subjects
can bring tremendous benefits. Foremost, exploring more than the main subjects
is crucial for young students
to figure out what their true purpose in life is and help them to land a career they are sincerely passionate about. Take my friend as an example, who majored in maths when he first joined the college. However
, later he found himself really good at finance after taking some financial courses and eventually decided to change his career to a different domain. And now he has become a financial expert. Without learning in addition
to maths, he may end up in an area where he couldn't be the best version of himself. Besides
, learning knowledge
that is
related to the main subjects
can empower an individual's expertise and make them irreplaceable. For instance
, for a student who majors in software, some understanding of hardware can boost their skills and eventually bring various opportunities in the job market. The further
you go, the more crucial the mixed knowledge
in both
areas will be.
Some people may argue that spending all the time
and keeping a focus on one qualification is of more importance. Firstly
, it is undeniable that the depth of understanding of a subject comes from attention and focused effort. However
, putting in a reasonable effort to learn both
main subjects
and some other knowledge
won't break this
attention. What matters here is the outstanding time
management strategy and an organized plan. For example
, they can save some wasted time
and spare that for the additional subjects
without impacting the main subjects
learning. Besides
, others may hold the point that if the students
spend too much time
on other subjects
, they won't have enough energy to make friends and develop soft skills. On the contrary
, they may meet people from other majors with various mindsets, which would allow them to make more friends and develop social skills.
In conclusion, it is vital for young groups to have a broader knowledge
beyond their main subject. As long as extra effort is taken and good time
management is in place, they can gain mixed knowledge
and meanwhile, do a wonderful job in the main subject.Some university students
want to learn about other subjects
in addition
to their main subjects
. Others believe it is more important to give all their time
and attention to studying for a qualification.
Discuss both
these views and give your own opinion.Submitted by woshizhpy on
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task achievement
Ensure that the introduction clearly outlines both viewpoints and refrain from discussing your opinion too early. Additionally, maintain a balanced discussion throughout the body paragraphs to give each perspective equal weight.
coherence cohesion
Although the essay is well-structured, use clearer topic sentences for each paragraph to guide your readers. Ensure seamless transitions between ideas to improve flow.
task achievement
Deepen the analysis of why some students might prefer to focus solely on their main subjects. Provide further specific examples or scenarios to support these points.
task achievement
The essay successfully covers both viewpoints and provides relevant examples to support its arguments.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion effectively frame the discussion, summarizing the key points articulated in the body of the essay.
coherence cohesion
Logical progression of ideas overall is evident, with each paragraph contributing to the central theme of the essay.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.
Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.
When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.
Linking words for giving examples:
- for example
- for instance
- to illustrate this
- to give a clear example
- such as
- namely
- to illustrate
- take, for example