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Some people think that working from home is better than working in an office. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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IT commonly believed that working from home is better than working in
a
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office
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. I partly agree with
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 opinion because it provides more flexibility and saves
time
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,
although
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office
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 work still has some
advantges
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advantages
.
fristly
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Firstly
, working from home has many
advantges
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advantages
 for employees.
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this
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 is because
may
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it may
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 save
time
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 and reduce traffic
congestion
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congestion,
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where as
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whereas
 people do not need to travel every day.
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for
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 example, many workers nowadays work remotely, which means
spend
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they spend
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 less
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 commuting
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 will decrease traffic congestion during rush hours.
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 , working in
a
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an
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office
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 still has some benefits.
employees
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Employees
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 can communicate
easier
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more easily
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 with each other, which may improve teamwork and increase the experience between them
so
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, so
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 the quality of the work will be better.
for inestance
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, new employees should learn more about
nature
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the nature
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 of the job and need more
eperience
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experience
 to improve their teamwork
and
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 the
office
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 will enhance their skills.
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to
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 sum up , working
in the
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from
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 home may save
the
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apply
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time
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 and decrease traffic congestion,
although
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 working in the
office
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 has many pros
and
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i
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I
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 believe that very important for the workers.

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task response
Write a clearer answer to the question. Say more strongly how far you agree or disagree, and keep this same view all through the essay.
task response
Add more detail to each main idea. Explain why home work gives more freedom, and why office work helps team work.
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Use examples with more detail. Your examples are on topic, but they are very short and general.
coherence and cohesion
Make your ideas link more smoothly. Use simple words like first, also, however, and as a result in the right place.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each paragraph focused on one main idea, then add two or three lines to support it.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence order and small grammar words, because some lines are hard to follow.
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You answer both sides of the topic and give your own view.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
The main ideas are easy to see: time saving at home and better team work in the office.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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