Animal rights have become a topic of discussion for individual and government how far is animal testing and using for making food is justifiable . Agree or disagree.

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for food.
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opinion,
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completely agree
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that the community and government should have
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essential
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and rules for animal testing and eating.
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think
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without
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and bairn.
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can control animal life and get
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benefit
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, some animal had similar skin to
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well as better to examine
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then
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people
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testing
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mice
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reasons to agree with
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firstly
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, the government should provide save place for
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animals
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to protect them and
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build
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testing
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in halal ways in
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special
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killed
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these rules improve people's
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people
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health and get original food and
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. In conclusion, through the
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topic
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individuals
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and
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governments
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to
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decide
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for
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animals
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Answer the question more clearly. Say one clear view and keep it the same in all parts.
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Add more main ideas about animal testing and about using animals for food.
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Use one or two clear examples that are easy to understand and fit your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Put each main idea in its own paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple link words like first, also, however, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each sentence connects well to the next one.
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You give your opinion in the introduction.
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You include both animal testing and food use.
coherence and cohesion
There is a basic introduction and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You try to use paragraphing for different ideas.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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