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The graph below shows information about male and female gym membership between 1980 and 2010. write 150 words

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The line graph compares male and female gym
membership
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 from 1980 to 2010.
Overall
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, male
membership
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 increased
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then
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and then
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 declined dramatically,
while
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 female
membership
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 remained relatively stable throughout the period. Between 1980 and 2005, male
membership
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 rose significantly from around 500 to 5,000. Female
membership
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also
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 grew gradually, starting at about 500 and reaching approximately 2,000 in 2005. After 2005, male
membership
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 plummeted to below 1,000 by 2010. Meanwhile, female
membership
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 stayed fairly balanced,
although
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 it declined slightly to under 2,000
at the end
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 of the period.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words membership with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuate
  • Spike
  • Steady increase
  • Decline
  • Plateau
  • Peak
  • Surge
  • Membership uptake
  • Gender disparity
  • Health consciousness
  • Fitness regimes
  • Societal norms
  • Technological advancements
  • Demographic shift
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