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University education is expensive, and not everyone can have university degree. Some people think that university should be free for everyone. Do you agree or disagree?

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University
education
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 is becoming more expensive nowadays, and many
people
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cannotafford
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cannot afford
 the cost of obtaining a degree.
some
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people
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 believe that university
education
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 should be free for everyone. I strongly agree with
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 opinion
becauase
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because
education
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 is a basic right and it can improve both individuals' lives and society as a whole.
Fristly
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Firstly
, free university
education
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 would give equal
oppertunities
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opportunities
 to all students regardless of their financial situation.
many
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 talented students are unable to continue their studies
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 high
tution
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tuition
 fees. If
nuiversities
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universities
 were free, more
people
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 would have the chance to gain qualifications and
atchieve
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achieve
 their career goals.
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, society would benefit from a larger number of skilled
and
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apply
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professionals.
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, educated citizens contribute positively to the economy and the community.
Univirsety
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University
 graduates are more likely to find stable jobs and earn higher incomes. They
also
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 tend to have a better
undrestanding
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understanding
 of social issues and can make informed
decision
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decisions
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.
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, investing in free
education
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 can bring long-term benefits to the entire country.
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, some
people
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 argue that providing free
unvirsety
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university
education
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 would place a heavy
finanical
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financial
 burden on governments.
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while
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this
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 may be true,
i
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I
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 believe that long- term advantages outweigh the costs. Governments can view
education
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 as an investment in the future rather than an expense. In conclusion, I strongly agree that
univirsety
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university
education
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 should be free for everyone.
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 would create equal opportunities, improve
employment
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the employment
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 process, and contribute to the
devlopment
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development
 of society.

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task response
For task response, your answer is clear and you give your opinion from the start. To get a higher score, add one more strong example to support each main idea.
task response
For task response, your ideas are relevant, but they are a bit general. Try to explain how free university helps real people or a real country in a more clear way.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, your essay has a clear order with introduction, body, and conclusion. This is good.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, use linking words carefully. You use words like firstly, secondly, however, and therefore well, but make sure each sentence connects smoothly to the next one.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, some sentences have small grammar or word form problems, and this can make the flow less smooth. Check spelling and sentence form carefully.
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You answer the question fully and clearly say that you strongly agree.
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Your main points stay on topic and support your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear beginning, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
You use simple linking words well to guide the reader.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tuition fees
  • financial aid
  • economic disparity
  • skilled workforce
  • inclusive society
  • student debt
  • educational accessibility
  • invest in education
  • employment opportunities
  • economic growth
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