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Your colleague has invited you to his farewell party. You will not be able to attend the party, write a letter to the friend. Explain the situation, Say why you will not be attending, Say something about the period you have worked together and his/her work.

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Dear Sam, I hope you and your family are doing well. I am very unhappy that I can't attend your
fairwell
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farewell
 party.
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 thing is that
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 our college is conducting a
five day
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five-day
 workshop next week. I am assigned as a coordinator for the program. I can't escape from the responsibilities that are assigned
me
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to me
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. So, I won't be available at the
fairwell
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farewell
 party. Can you remember the
time
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 when we worked together at the college
.
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 You were my senior in the department. You helped me
lot
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a lot
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 of
time
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 to complete my file
works
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work
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 in the
begining
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beginning
. We used to go for tea at the
time
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 11 am. You were a tea lover at that
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. Those days were so amazing and enjoyable. I miss those days. Once
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again,
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 I regret to say my absence
in
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from
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 the
fairwell
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 party. Take care
my
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, my
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 dear friend
and
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, and
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 see you soon. Yours lovingly, Rahul

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts, but add a bit more about his work and why you value him.
task response
Task response: Use a more clear and polite style in some lines.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your ideas are in a good order, but some sentences need better link words.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Keep one main idea in each part and check small word errors.
task response
Task response: You explain why you cannot go, and the reason is clear.
task response
Task response: You include warm personal points about your time together.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear opening, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The greeting and closing fit a friendly letter.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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