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Your friend had made a plan for you to see a movie together but you cannot now not join him. You've found another friend who can go instead of you. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Explain why you cannot go anymore Say who can go instead of you Say why this person is a good person to go with

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Dear friend,
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 hope you
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 well
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, amd
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amd i
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and I
 just want to inform you that
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 cannot go to
cinema
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the cinema
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with
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 some personal reasons.
to
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 add on it, as you
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that i
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 just started my new job and it is difficult for me to get leave
specially
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 during my probation period.
as
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know
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 it can make impact on my career as well
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 my
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financial
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, as you
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that i
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 am currently living with our classmate vishal that you know
him
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well. he can go with you
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 movie.
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, you
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 him since our childhood
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 it is not a problem for you.
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,
i
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 must
apologize
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 for it
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however
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 i think you know my problem. Thank you your friend Gurbakhshish Singh

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts, but give a bit more detail about your reason.
task response
Task response: Use a more friendly tone, like writing to a real friend.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your ideas are in a clear order.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Use full stops and capital letters more carefully.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Keep one main idea in each paragraph.
task response
Task response: You clearly say why you cannot go.
task response
Task response: You clearly say who can go instead of you.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has an opening, body, and ending.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: You use linking words like 'Furthermore' and 'however'.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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