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The maps show the changes made Happy Valley shopping center and its surroundings in 1982 and 2012.

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The two maps illustrate the transformation of the Happy Valley shopping
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center
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centre
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from 1982 to 2012.
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, the shopping
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center
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centre
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 became visitor-oriented with the introduction of themed restaurants, a parking lot, and a
furniture
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 retail section. Notably, several places,
such
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 as internal facilities and the trees surrounding the
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center
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centre,
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 were not subject to changes over a three decade period. In 1982, the
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center
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centre
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 offered a limited number of amenities, with the road leading to
lobby
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the lobby
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 area providing access to shoppers. In the heart of
hall
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the hall
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 was located entertaiment area and dining facilities
including
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, including
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 a coffee shop and a food
store
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was
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, which was
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 placed
in
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on
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 top of the building. Toilets and
elevator
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elevators
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 were
from
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at
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 the
botttom
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bottom
 of the map
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while
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, while
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 a number of
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store
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stores
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,
such
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 as sports, electronics, and
furniture
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 equipments to the right.
Additionaly
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Additionally
, the outside of the building
encircled
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is encircled
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 with natural elements like a row of trees and a lake
which
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, which
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provided
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provides
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 greenery to visitors.
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, after three decades, the lake disappeared and established to
furniture
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 retail department. Another
signifacnt
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significant
 incorporation was
parking
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a parking
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 lot for
consumer
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consumers
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 with private vehicles.
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, a range of opportunities
in the
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apply
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inside
of
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apply
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the
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center
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centre
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: sports and electronics stores were relocated to the
tip
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top
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 section
while
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 toilets, an elevator, and the entertainment area remained unchanged.
Also
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,
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furniture
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a furniture
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store
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 was converted by food
store
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close
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, close
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 to which
a
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apply
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themed restaurants were
also
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 built

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, such, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words center, furniture, store with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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